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Now it's over and done,
but, boy, it was fun,
sure had some good times,
I'll remember the rhymes.

Things like this fade,
though some feelings have stayed.
But we must move along,
find a different song.

And I'm sorry if I hurt you,
but at least I was true.
Sorry that it had to end,
but we were better as friends.
©2007-2009 ~omnipotent-lion
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Hey, look! More sucky romance.

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:icongothiquehobbit:
Sucky? Amazing! I like this poem, it tells a story of sorts. I, as a big fan of romantic poetry, find this relatible (sic). It reminds me of one of my poems, actually. "Eve Was Framed" or "Lackadaisical Letter", maybe. Maybe it's just my ego inflating. Maybe it's just because you're awesome! Either way, I love this poem. Great job, I like the imagery and wording, and meter. Keep up the good work!

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People living deeply have no fear of death.- Anais Nin
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We need to be the change we wish to see in the world.- Mohandas K. Gandhi
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When Life does not find a singer to sing her heart she produces a philosopher to speak her mind.- Kahlil Gibran
:iconomnipotent-lion:
Thanks ^_^ It's always an honor to be compared to one with such talent as you =P

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:icongothiquehobbit:
:hug: Thanks for calling me a great talent. You're a wonderful writer, too.

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People living deeply have no fear of death.- Anais Nin
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We need to be the change we wish to see in the world.- Mohandas K. Gandhi
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When Life does not find a singer to sing her heart she produces a philosopher to speak her mind.- Kahlil Gibran
:icongothiquehobbit:
*XD I'm big-headed, apparently, adding in words to what you'd said. Thanks for saying I'm talented, though.

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People living deeply have no fear of death.- Anais Nin
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We need to be the change we wish to see in the world.- Mohandas K. Gandhi
---
When Life does not find a singer to sing her heart she produces a philosopher to speak her mind.- Kahlil Gibran
:iconomnipotent-lion:
No problem! And aw. I'm flattered. *blush*
Haha.

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**Omnipotent-lion: Taking over the universe since 1991**

Writer's forum: [link]
Costume Maker's Magazine: [link]
:icongothiquehobbit:
^_^ You are one of the few writers on here that I can say is good. You rhymes are well though-out, your stories are intriguing, and you have nifty meters that you follow. You, ma'am, are one of my favorite poets.

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People living deeply have no fear of death.- Anais Nin
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We need to be the change we wish to see in the world.- Mohandas K. Gandhi
---
When Life does not find a singer to sing her heart she produces a philosopher to speak her mind.- Kahlil Gibran
:iconomnipotent-lion:
The fact that you just said "nifty meters" makes me all the happier.
The same could be said for you, m'dear. I pride myself more as a novelist/short story writer, but reading your poems inspires me to write my own.

dA does need more talent, in terms of writing at least. *sigh*

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**Omnipotent-lion: Taking over the universe since 1991**

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:icongothiquehobbit:
Aw, I'm glad I can inspire you. ^_^




I think the problem with DeviantART's writers is that they don't dig deep enough into their inner selves, and try hard enough to find things they really know about. They just write whatever comes to their heads.

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People living deeply have no fear of death.- Anais Nin
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We need to be the change we wish to see in the world.- Mohandas K. Gandhi
---
When Life does not find a singer to sing her heart she produces a philosopher to speak her mind.- Kahlil Gibran
:iconomnipotent-lion:
Yeah----people don't appreciate good writing and good writers like they should. So many mediocre writers ruin the trade for the rest of us dedicated wordsmiths. It's a real pity.

Speaking of, I started this writing forum a while back for writers who actually want critique. It sort of died, but I'm hoping I can bring it back. You should join it! There's a link in my sig.

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**Omnipotent-lion: Taking over the universe since 1991**

Writer's forum: [link]
Costume Maker's Magazine: [link]

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